bisquit

firstly, this is a very good topic to write about. it is true, many things on the news are about the negatives in life. Unfortunately, they appear to be dominant. ...

wow, you have a good poem here! the rhythm works really well and the rhyming is good too. i think at the end of the second line, u need a ...

War is a very common topic to write about so it has to be done well. i believe that you have done a good job of this poem and it ...

AWESOME. hehe. this was really funny and entertaining to the reader. the things i would have picked up on have already been mentoned. a very promising story. im interested to ...

wow. i really enjoyed reading this and made me smile many times/ i picked up on a few things that need editing... in the first bit you say... 'out so ...

thanks very much all :) i enjoyed writing it too!

thanks for all the hlpful comments people, i will take on board what was said Eating disorders are something that i believe need more awareness because people dont always see ...

This is really cool! :) it has a great storyline and is written with great attention to detail too! the few things i would point have already been said by ...

This is really good. :) a nice quick poem that contains some great rhymes and holds a strong rhythm. because i think it has potential, i am going to pick ...

WOW! this is a really awesome idea and brilliantly structured. You obviously thought this through and i think that its great how you write poetry for chapter beginnings.! It leaves ...

thanks all ;) again!

Wow. this is a well written and moving poem. your attention to emotion is great and you make a good impact on the reader. In a way, i agree with ...

this is great! well done! the rhyming and rhythm is spot on! the only thing i would query is ... 'ten thousand one times all told.' im not sure if ...

AWESOME! i really love this story! :) i especially love the atmosphere at the end truly, i think you could leave it at... 'Alexis died on the operating table that ...

thanks noo! hehe :) xx