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WOw, this is really deep and meaningful. poems that mean something are always good for readers to read. I love how you list the things he didnt do. It shows ...

very moving indeed. :) to be honest, at first i thought it was going to be like in a soap with the woman running away! but you proved me wrong ...

Firstly, u write beautifully. i will get the tips over with one really likes tips so i will not make them last long. 1) quick thing...you need a space in ...

bear in mind, i wrote this in 10 mins. so its not very good. haha All I want is to hold his hand, Feel his presence, Touch his face; Never ...

wow, Firstly, this was amazingly well written. :) so powerful and touching. good job. i love how you begin with questions; it really kickstarts the poem :) um, just a ...

wow. this was a very powerful poem indeed. especially the single lines! the rhyming is also really good :) just a few pointeres... 'without' is one word. you made it ...

thanks for all those tips, i will update and then put the edited version in this ones place. tah muchly :) bisquit

Advisable to read chapter 1 first... Chapter Two-Subtle Spying and parkour World War Four broke out on Saturday evening at Little Cottage. With World War Three breaking out the day ...

not only lyrics but definately poetry. it is short, sweet and very well written. :) you are missing a question mark after the word night in this sentence 'So please ...

i read this and instantly thought wow. the way you have written it is so amazing and u have paid a lot of attention to detail. i love your rhyming ...

This has been written really well. :) obviously rather shocking at the end! a severed hand. ! this adds in an element of mystery to the story. i thinks its ...

i understand why you love this piece. it really is very good. well done. there are so many great points to make. where to begin? hmm. firstly, i love the ...

i just thought i'd let everyone know that this story is now adapted and will not be following the same idea as the eating disorder one which it used to ...

its true and i will use the old phrase...dont judge a book by its cover. this is really nice and has a clear message :) good work as was with ...

this is a very well thought out and meaningful poem :) good work. you have got some really great lines in here. in fact here are some of my favourites... ...