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FIrstly, great work :) there are some really nice aspects to this. lets get the tips out the way... 1) try not to repeat dark in the first few lines ...

ok, firstly, this was well written. The beginning was especially good and drew the reader in :) great work. a start always needs to be successful :) just a few ...

While moonbeams whispered and tall trees shouted, A beautiful girl flew past; As heavenly as the angels above, Her pain pierced the night at last. She sat and watched the ...

YES! that last line is fab! so so true to some people and leaves impact. exaclty what i meant :) great work :) very interested and intigued by your work ...

i really liked this! you captured some amazing feeling and things to think about were commonly told your rhyming is lovely and it really works with the piece. the reader ...

i really liked this evie it was sweet and cleverly done i must say! i personally cannot write anything of the sort as haikus are very difficult . OR ARE ...

First impressions, Wow! SO much to take in! its so fantastic, your attention to detail is outstanding and your work is at a very high level! From the sky to ...

thanks very much, i will make those changes. :) and thanks for taking the time to read my work :)

was bored when i did this...not much good...thought it was about time i uploaded something new though/ When the World sleeps Peace did not prevail through the world that night, ...

wow, i agree with natalie; the way the anger came throo was fab! you may not write happy poems but your good at what you do! :) great work i ...

hey, no need to be nervous! you have a talent. this was a very well written and thought out poem. :) great work! there are some amazing lines in this ...

I think you have chosen a good topic to work with :) there are some brilliant lines in here with a clear message attatched. for example i love these lines... ...

Well, Firstly, i think that there are some really good aspects to this poem including... 'The killer looked in awe' good start. Immediately intorduces the poem . the line..'The man ...

wow, this is great. your attention to detail is outstanding! :) its very realistic actually and possesses so much detail that it blows the viewer away. really great work! i ...

thanks all! hehe :) xx