birchermuesli

Every time I close my eyes Images ripple , full of lies (You need some sort of breaking punctuation here - perhaps a dash?) A whisper so silent, a siren's ...

It was seven o'clock on Monday morning – time for school. Slapping her hands over her ears to muffle the piercing reminder from her persistent alarm clock, Katiana rolled out ...

Oh wow. Wow, wow. That was fantastic. You seem to have a gift in being able to portray scenes from the point of view of young children - the juvenile ...

Ooh, true story, eh? :P I'd love to see how it turns out! So first of all, great start. I really enjoyed your writing - it's quite light and easy ...

First of all, I absolutely adored this. You have such a high command with language and have the ability to make the reader feel as if they were in the ...

My gosh, this is amazing. I'm really in a rush to get somewhere, so I'll review properly later - I don't have enough time to type up all that I ...

This is short, sweet and subtle in its message. It was very enjoyable to read. :) Just a couple of quick nit-picking: Walking down the line What's gonna be my ...

I really, really love this. I have no idea why (not that it's bad or anything), but there's just something about this drawing that gets me, you know? It's just ...

This was a very descriptive piece, and quite effective at times. The only advice I would have is to minimise the number of times you use one or two word ...

This is probably the first real poem that I've written - I also wrote it about five minutes ago. I've been missing out, haven't I? :) [This version is edited. ...

Oh my gosh. Curse you, why do you write so well?! :P This has got to be one of the best poems I've read. Taking out all the capitilisations was ...

You, my friend, make me laugh. Laugh, laugh and laugh. :P

Homg I love you. Thank you so much for being amazing.

I really liked this! :) I think the extensive use of enjambment when you cut your sentences into several lines/stanzas really adds to the whole 'trash' concept of the poem. ...

Wow. I would just like to say that I used to have a massive, unhealthy obsession for Skandar Keynes (Skandy, is what I called him :P) a couple of years ...