biancarayne

So the characters did seem intriguing, certainly...but I don't much like the way you introduced them, telling all about them the way you did...maybe it's just my preference, but I ...

thank you both so much for your comments!!

A slip of the pen and you know me- frontward and sideways, an amoeba submerged in a glacial metal sky, beneath the moon’s telescopic eye. Raising hands, I break the ...

thank you so much for your help!! I'm... lost. Each stanza makes enough sense in itself, but altogether, it's a bit confusing. Though from here: When the funeral is over, ...

I liked it, but then I'm not entirely sure what it was about. It was too long though, for me, I felt like the idea and meaning were dragged out. ...

~I'm not sure if it's clear enough what this one is about.....I like it for some reason, but I'm not sure if it's any good either so anyone with any ...

The idea was definitely a very, mystical one and had a lot of nice imagery- however, I don't much like the way it was written as far as each line ...

The idea was definitely a very, mystical one and had a lot of nice imagery- however, I don't much like the way it was written as far as each line ...

To everyone who has commented on this so far, thank you so much! To any future comments: There was a part in here in here I took it because it ...

I jot down the letter, swaying to the rhythm of each jaded love profession, swimming in the black light, floundering beneath every too-sharp note. Each scribble, each black line and ...

Oh yeah, and comments on how to improve this appreciated- I think my story writing skills are a bit rusty right now...and this isn't the whole chapter, really...I haven't found ...

The sea was angrier than usual that day. The sailors' wives, sitting on their porches in the rocking chair, cast a wary glance in the direction, dark thoughts playing through ...

I'll be with the pill bottles, the scalpels, the nooses if you ever want to find me; I'll be looking at my rain-rippled reflection in the glass, a ghost of ...

Ya- the thing about Puscha said about the format, I think it's like a rule here or whatever. Anyway, it definitely makes reading easier. Slotting her head through the noose ...

Hi there! First off, I'd like to say that this has a lot of potential but it does need some improvement. At first, I was disapointed by a lack of ...