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Well, I definitely did enjoy reading this a lot! I'm not a big fan of rhyming and it did seem to me that some of the rhyming in this one ...

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So some of the words used in this like "rain" and "blood" do convey kind of a cliched image and idea...and this piece could be spiced up a little with ...

The imagery in this was definitely very, very strong. At first, looking at the title I supposed that this would be very cliche and unoriginal, but I'm happy to be ...

I don't know much about sonnets, but you've written a very beautiful, wonderfully descriptive one. The only thing I saw was that some of the commas seemed unnecessary to me. ...

Brier was born on a full moon. Silver shafts of moonlight pierced through the blackness of the night to reveal a patch of dirt with a row of withered flowers ...

Well, a lot could definitely be added to this story to make it more dramatic and is, it does read kind of boringly and isn't something most people would be ...

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