biancarayne

The beginning kind of seemed like it began in the middle of a sentence, like there should be more there that isn't...also, I think maybe you should expand on the ...

I like this poem because it's brief and yet the emotions in it are very strong. The way you begin it was very intriguing to me and made me want ...

This is definitely a very creative poem. However, I'm not sure why a change in thoughts would have things popping, though that might just be me. Also, the way you ...

Some of the rhymes in this didn't really rhyme at all...also, the rhythm was a wee bit off in some places. But you could definitely feel the sadness throughout this, ...

I'm not sure how the mountains fit into this because the main idea seemed to be really storms...and also to me it didn't seem to end right, like there should ...

I like the rhyming in this and how it seems to help the flow roll along really well. Parts of it were a bit confusing and could be clarified, but ...

Hey, the emotions in this were definitely strong and it was a sad write...whoever this is about, if you like them then try and talk to them and get to ...

thanks to everyone who's commented so far!

In the beginning I think you should explain what "the Watch" is to avoid unnecessary confusion. Also explain about the murderers and this...guild. The phrase, "venom from a cobra’s fang" ...

Okay, so the plot was pretty typical to me and there was nothing to set this apart from millions of other fantasy stories. Also, much of the wording was bland ...

I agree with Snoik. I mean, I love the description, it's beautiful how you manipulate the sentences in a way that it almost seems like how i write (hehe), but ...

Wow...this is...wow...I am truly astonished at your um...unique creation...yeah lol. truly a work of art lol.

I liked the beginning and I liked how it had such a surreal feeling to it. Yet... I feel like I didn't really have any meaning to it. I mean, ...

Hmmm, well the idea behind this was certainly intriguing and creative. The grammar and spelling could be improved as there were quite a few mistakes I saw in this. Some ...

I saw it first as a reflection in your eyes. A quaint little fence, the white paint still fresh. We could smell it from where we were beside the empty ...