biancarayne

Esme- Thanks so much for your comments and for pointing out all those things! And, I think I see what you mean by a lot of the things you pointed ...

First, thank you so much for your comment! :) I appreciate it a whole heck of a lot :) Well, the very first thing I have to say is that ...

~I'm sorry, I'd already read like a lot of this before I realized that it was so old...but I decided to keep going anyways :) And, thanks so much for ...

I have a friend that nobody else knows about. That’s because our rendezvous is late at night where no one else is around. Usually, Bo falls asleep in front of ...

The first thing I noticed was that the description is too heavy, with too many substituted words and fancy descriptions that make it sound like Eragon. That's not a compliment, ...

The remarkably intact condition of the city paled next to what they found there. They had passed the sign welcoming them into San Angeles, with dust accumulating on its smooth ...

Even after the ash settled, the sky was saturnine, gray like smoke choking the air around the charred remnants of the forest, thick and damp with humidity that made breathing ...

thanks to everyone who's commited so far!! leja- yeah, i definitely agree with you about like the bogging down w/ musical terminology thing and about the lines with personification. azila- ...

I'm suprised there aren't other comments! this piece moved me like jazz and I love jazz. Your tone is smooth and it pulls upon my depths. The dance you perform ...

Firstly, I definitely did enjoy reading this and think it has a whole lot of potential still waiting to be tapped into it, so...excellent job! However, there are a couple ...

I don't know much about vilanelles- I think I've written maybe one once, but I don't know how they're supposed to be structured, so I can't give any help there. ...

This was definitely a very, very disturbing piece and the imagery was all pretty vivid. However, it was kind of hard to tell what this piece was supposed to be ...

This is really great. I love how you express yourself, and it flows beautifully. I especially enjoyed; "I tango in-between your fingertips." and "You play me like a saxophone, your ...

First Movement: I swing to the melody of your breathing. Your eyes are jazz, and I tango in-between your fingertips. The music we move to is rough and earthy, and ...

yeah, pm me when you get the font stuff fixed up :D