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I like this poem, it's simple but it works, if that makes sense. Very well written. I particularly like the second stanza. However I think 'misshapen' is the right word? ...

Thank you very much Coco, that's really kind :) I have more of the story up here on the site, should be in my portfolio if you wanted to take ...

I'm British so we spell realised with an s rather than a z :) Thank you very much for your comment! Becki

Hi, I liked this opening to the story, although it didn't give an awful lot away about the storyline but I think it's fairly easy to imagine. It's very well ...

Hey everyone, I'm a newbie and have posted up three parts of the first draft of my current story and would love some reviews! The links (in order) are: Any ...

Hi there! I realise this is an old thread but if you're still taking reviews I'd love you to do mine :)

Chapter Seven A shoulder to cry on It was around 9 o clock that night, while I was nursing Abigail that she called. I hadn’t heard her voice in years ...

Hiya, First of all, just a couple of nit-picky mistakes: She blew him a silent kiss; as her grey eyes took him in hungrily. The ';' isn't needed there The ...

Hey, I've not read any of your other stuff as of yet but I really liked the way this was written. It was clear and had a definite air of ...

My next three chapters :) again, constructive criticism welcome as well as reviews in general. This is only my first draft after all! Chapter Four Hitting Rock Bottom After my ...

Thank you :) that seems the best way to do it, I'll go and do some editing

Hi there, Ok, quite a few points. First of all, there are a number of spelling/grammar/punctuation errors. I wake up to the sunny outside shining in but the frost still ...

Hi, I liked the idea of the story and the first few paragraphs flow fairly well. I think there is a possibilty for a little more detail in the description ...

Hi there, A few points really. I am unsure on the writing style you have chosen. To me it reads more like an article rather than the prologue of a ...

Ok, so I usually write in a third person narrative because I find it easier when describing different settings from different perspectives. But I am writing my current story in ...