berrylique

it doesn't seem to have a plot, like a real story. i think your style of writing is still OK, but you need to use a wider range of emotions. ...

1. Eragon or Harry (as heroes)? Harry 2. Galbatorix or Lord Voldemort (as villains)? Voldemort 3. The writing style of Christopher Paolini or J.K.Rowling (only the style, not the plot)? ...