berrylique

it's spooky, yet cool at the same time(: how did you do that?

i love this! it's really well-draawn(: the doll is very cute too. nice work!

7/10, a bit too plain, but i liked the penmanship(:

i didn't finish reading it, as my eyes were straining to read clearly. i will list out the mistakes: 1. you should have paragraphs, like introvert said. the reader will ...

nice manga! the one with the sword looks weird... maybe you want to make the girl look more fierce and, hmm... muscular? she looks very skinny to me.

they are gorgeous! i thought the last one was as beautiful as the others... the first one is my favourite :D i think you have potential! :D

thanks kitty, misty and chocoholic for the crtique and comments, they are greatly appreciated. :D and chocoholic, i didn't want to elaborate on the baby's illness as I didn't want ...

Heyya! I am Berry!

it's very beautiful and cute(: you have a nice theme going. perharps a better rhyme? it would have a better flow(although the flow here is good). nice one.

let's see... Your harsh screams peirce the night i think the correct spelling is "pierce". Dry... yep, it kind of doesn't fit in. and i think ending it with a ...

i thought it was lovely(: it's definitely not lame. it was described very beautifully and it's also very simple. maybe you can describe more, but keep it as beautiful as ...

it's cool. i like the way you showed your emotions, the anger and sorrow. i agree with the previous people. you should use a wider range of vocabulary, instead of ...

they are cute(: a bit plain, though. i like the self-destruct button one. it's cute :D

Yes, the title is spelt wrongly. And as the above people have mentioned, you have a few grammar mistakes too. I think you should give us more details, and you ...

This is my first piece in YWS! Critique needed urgently! Love, berrylique. Thanks kitty15, misty and chocoholic for the critque and comments. :D Chapter 1 Snow began falling from the ...