beginningtowrite

Thanks heaps everyone (: I am in the middle of writing part two of chapter two and then I am going to go back and edit it all properly. Also, ...

Thanks heaps for the reviews! As I said in the spoiler though this is only part one of chapter two, there is another section coming. I will be sure to ...

As was mentioned previously the story was a bit lacking. I didn't personally think there was enough in here for it to be classified as a whole chapter, perhaps write ...

Bland? what do you mean by that? Sorry if that sounds rude haha xD And thank you (:

Just like the other chapters this was great! I do have a few things I want to point out however. Firstly; I think that some of the dialogue seems a ...

This was good, most of the mistakes I found have already been pointed out. As was previously mentioned you need to change some of the words over like Alec for ...

This is great! I will admit I did get goose bumps haha. I found one or two grammatical/spelling errors. One the third day I had opened my eyes to feel ...

Thanks so much (: its good to see where i can improve! Thanks heaps and i'll keep you up to date (:'

This was good, but again it needs some touching up. You are saying things almost too matter-of-factly. Like if someone told me I was a vampire I'd laugh and wouldn't ...

This was a good first chapter, but like the others said there are a few grammar issues that need to be worked out. “Kayla” Ryan began, but he couldn’t find ...

Again this is absolutely amazing! You're attention to detail never fails to amaze me. I did, however, find some spelling/grammar issues. I glance back over my shoulder only once, and ...

All I can really say is wow. To be totally honest I read the plot/synopsis and was sceptical about reading it, but I am so glad I decided to. The ...

Again this is great! I couldn't really find anything wrong with it to be honest, just keep up the good work! Looking forward to reading chapter three when you've written ...

Please read the spoiler: Okay so this is not all of chapter two, it is only part one. The second part is coming shortly. I was also considering having this ...

Thanks for that! I will be sure to edit it soon, thanks for the review! :D