beethovenkarajan

Great job! Before i get to the heart of the story, I'll just point out a few mistakes. 1) You say "Now, my two world were colliding". I believe you ...

This is so passionate, my eyes teared up. You are very lucky to have a girl that you love so much. I hope she knows how much she means to ...

Thanks for the feedback everyone! I fixed the errors, and I'll be sure to write much more. I'm going to go read Mimi now 567ajt!

This is so beautiful! I especially like the metaphor at the beginning and the repetition at the end. I agree with the above comments though, I think you should expand ...

But what is said of the love unrequited? it sits in the corner, biding its time hoping to be realized belated to ignore such beauty is crime Though forever beyond ...