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I usually write in first person, present tense or third person, past tense. I don't mix and match, and I've never thrown both in in one story for fear that ...

Roflcopter. I found this incredibly amusing, and there's no one really obvious problem with it. What I did notice is that it feels like it's missing something, and it's hard ...

The spacing strikes me as odd. Not the format, but the way you've spaced your lines and stanzas. They're so spread out! Grammar: You can choose whether or not to ...

Hi! I'm going to critique this as I read. So, critique ahoy! The morning was a quiet one, the forest only beginning to awaken. The sun crept lazily over the ...

Hi, Spike! Before I start, most people make two critiques before they post their own work. You should probably do that too. I agree with Clograbby, it was very wordy, ...

I only read part of this, and it's the same problem as before. It still moves to fast, and there is still not anything to make the reader care, in ...

Hi, Vampy_Girl! You need to work on your grammar. I found a lot of run - ons, and missing punctuation, especially towards the middle, and it got very distracting. It ...

Well, one thing you guys could do as a group would be NaNoWriMo; you know, National Novel Writing Month, when you try to write fifty thousand words in the month ...

Hi, Sonlen! I read all of this, and I have quite a few things to say. This needs some work. It's very sketchy, and it's all exposition. There's little to ...

I think that this chapter was needed. It gives the readers a bit of a breather during a story with what I predict to be a very intense pace, and ...

Once again, it's good - I must say you are a master of suspense, but I feel that your characters are lacking, and they're lacking actuality. One of the questions ...

Okay, I agree with the posters above me, this is good, and has potential. I only have a few nitpicky things to say. Becky’s favorite time, he thought, remembering the ...

I'm going to be honest. I only read most of this. You're English is solid. So is the concept. I'll give you that. But that's not enough and what I'm ...

This is good, but I think you might want to be careful that you don't fall into the same mold every time you go to write a romance - something ...

Hi! What I am good at critiquing: Fiction in general. I'm pretty much willing to do any fiction, though a disclaimer comes with this: Sometimes I have a short attention ...