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hey, thanks for your critique. i guess i should explain a few things. the chapters aren't connected. well they are of course, which you'll find out later, but its not ...

ok you're a really good writer. very descriptive, very proffesional. i like that. but i have to agree with the other person who reviewed. its really long, and i think ...

let me tell you what i don't really like so we can just get that out of the way: ~the in-paragraph dialogue. i don't know if anyone else said it ...

i really like the story. its suspensful, simply written, and and left me wanting to read more. there's just a few things that bothered me, nothing major. in this sentence ...

alright, well here's the first two chapters on something i've started on. let me know what you think and if i shuld submit more. thanks: 1 My wife’s been telling ...

i really like the way you wrote it. the whole "she says" things makes it different. besides some needed polishing i like it!