barefootrunner

It's a lovely poem. It delves into a deep, stirring problem. This is mirrored by its subdued tone. There were a few grammos and typos: When your mopping a quiet ...

Nice poem! At first the rhyme in every line irritated me -- it felt as though the words were chosen solely for their rhyming value, they sounded forced, unnatural and ...

You must know, before I even start, that I am not a great poet and my opinions stay opinions and not rules. Firstly, grammar: Your deep green eyes beckons me ...

YESSSS! Can't wait! I'm really excited now!

Culprit Ecstatic, she leaps from the pyre of her maker and singing, affords him a kiss of delight. She does not yet know where the breezes will take her, but ...

I agree with storyweaver. Maybe some rhyme or meter would do the poem good. Don't get me wrong -- I have nothing against free verse, but free verse is a ...

Ooooh! Great stuff! Now it is all revealed! I absolutely love this novel, it's a great Red Riding Hood story that doesn't shove it in your face. The grammar was ...

Right. First encounter between identical twins. The slight stagnation was great; one should linger on this topic. I am going to red-marker this one again to pick out grammar errors ...

Hi there! Yes, I'm back! Your grammar was great, the control over the topic was fantastic, I have one grammar bone to pick with you -- My Mama wouldn't do ...

Nice feeling of quiet menace here. You leave the readers with an "oh my word what is he doing there" feeling about Rice, but I must warn -- beware of ...

Oh, bliss! You have fabulous grammar, perfect control over the topic and a biting ending. I like your style, it feels distilled and well-edited. You took a long time to ...

I'm back and ready with another flood of positively draconian criticism! :) Here are some typos and grammos: The memories, the memories. That full stop must be a comma. Susan ...

I'll review the grammar in depth first. Sorry about the harsh, nitpicky criticism! I'm warning you in advance that I am very fiddly about grammar and that I really do ...

I loved the story - it was so surprising! You need lots of work on keeping those tenses straight, though. They were really mixed up. I just copied the whole ...

I really liked this! Great, gripping idea with lots of potential for development. A few picks at typos and grammos: But we not to ever criticize or question it, Karuk ...