barefootrunner

I like the direction this is taking -- it gets more complicated! Now I want to know more about the world that they are in and what's going on. Why ...

That's so cute! I love the new depth to the story and Freki is adorable! The story is very realistic, well reasoned and clear. This is so beautiful - if ...

I rocketed backwards into my home world – into my home town – into one of my favorite inn’s small, rickety beds. I lay panting for a minute, then sat ...

This is beautiful! Such imagery, I love the peace... I'm also not a usual romance customer, but to me, this looked well-written and I fell in love with it! It ...

Amygabb, you are a poet! This was great! I could really empathise with the narrator! I keep using excited bursts of exclamation marks! This said what I wanted to say ...

I have nothing against free verse... Really! :) To poets who find themselves past using meter – To poets who write without syntax or rhyme, To those who think writing ...

I like the sense of mystery about this poem, but there was something bothering me. You seemed to be attempting half-rhyme, maybe even meter in the first few lines, but ...

This cover looks like it will enfold a murder-mystery or a puzzling problem. The text gives it a sinister tone because of the dripping and the incongruous darkness, the blue ...

This was written in a particularly condensed, personal style of writing, which I found very interesting, if sometimes overly descriptive. There were no superfluous adjectives, though, and the grammar

I woke up feeling better. I was still sore, but my skin wasn’t burning and my head was clear. And the room was empty and quiet. That was the best ...

Awwwh! This is so cute! You also have practically no grammar mistakes, so I'll just suggest "more suitable" phrases in a few places. I love the wolf, I love Cheyne, ...

You couldn't have put it better! There seems to be one grammar error, though. I'm not sure if you meant it to be that way, but "mom jeans" might really ...

Thank you so much for the review! I agree about the lace - it was forced. The "culprit" is in fact a fire, so the whole poem is an extended ...

Good! I seem to sense some form of trouble brewing... What will happen next? The girls were interacting wonderfully, but I still can't quite figure out their individual characters. Try ...

Now that is scary. I loved it. The grammar was a bit jumbled, though, so let's sort that out first. If I'm very harsh, allow me to apologise: I don't ...