barefootrunner

Nice pun in the title! There are a few grammos and typos. Jace will never go to high school since he already knows more than most scholars, I mean wouldn%u2019t ...

I liked the first, almost-structured stanza, then a complete collapse of all control and a torrent of rage, disappointment and incomprehension running through the poem. The stanzas were good, but ...

There was an American dude, Who'd eat any foreigners' food. He was sent to Shanghai, Tried a strange-looking pie, Now he pecks like a right little prude.

There was a young prince, George the Great, Who swore like a bloody first mate. His mother's last hope was to call in the Pope - He gave George an ...

This is a highly motivating poem! The rhyme that you used was great. I liked the fourth stanza, it followed a "bang bang bang crash" kind of pattern, which is ...

Poor Dylan. This story is interesting, but full of strange mysteries. Who was Dylan? What was to happen to the narrator? Who was the narrator? I am a bit confused. ...

How do you do that? The bottle must have taken hours of patience and lots of fine detail! I can't believe it! That is great! It has detail, just the ...

I liked the shape of the poem -- this seems silly, but it was in blocks... like chocolate... You described that helpless sensation of the Chocolate Crave so well, I've ...

I really liked the way that your engaged every sense in this poem. This is something that many poets somehow neglect -- they focus on touch, sound or sight. I ...

This is a really good piece -- I can't complain in any way: No typos, no spelling mistakes... It is all so sad. I loved the mood, the way you ...

Yay! I really enjoyed the story and the characters were built perfectly. The only part that bothered me a bit in this chapter, was the start. It felt as though ...

I landed in the middle of a colossal city with a flash of neon light, which blended in perfectly with the background of illuminated billboards. It was dark. Wind whipped ...

This prologue is intriguing and ominous, with fantastic character mixed in! I already like Gerald. There were isolated typos which I'm just going to go over, but your writing style ...

LadyPurple seems to have got all the spelling mistakes, but I like the story itself. The hopelessness of the girl's life is mirrored by your writing style. I really liked ...

This is so sad, mysterious, beautiful and misty. I sat sighing afterwards, pulling my mind out of this world that you have created. This was simply magical to read. I ...