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I enjoyed this chapter as well but I find that you are not really showing us what happened but telling us. Let us feel as if we know Lucy and ...

I enjoyed this one very much. I liked how you focused on the growing friendship of Eve and Jeremy within this chapter. I found a few spelling mistakes but besides ...

I am... intrigued to see where this will lead. I like the plot and feel that this a lot of potential. The first chapter really drew me in and to ...

Chapter 1 Evelyn November 9th, 1935 Heavy steps came marching up the spiral staircase. I could hear mindless chatter all the way from the kitchen. Mother was having tea with ...

Hello! Your story is intriguing. I enjoyed reading it. I have a few nitpicks though. First off, is the time period the Depression era? It seems so just by you ...

Hello! This was amazing! It was heartbreaking. The flow and character was all there. I loved the depth and emotion you breathed into this song. I was near tears at ...

I enjoyed this piece very much. The plot that you have created is intriguing. I like how you had an aura of mystery as to what was going to happen. ...

Hey! :D Who are your favorite authors? J.k. Rowling?! Do you have a favorite band? Um... lets see... what is your favorite animal? Its nice to know more about you!

Oh! I would like one please!

I enjoy chocolate soy milk. I tastes a little like almonds. :lol:

As the reviewer above me has already told you about the grammar, I will turn my attention onto other things. I enjoy where the story is going and I hope ...

Picks: Little Women by Louisa May Alcott. A classic. Shows the hidden wonders and simple times of the Civil War era. The Letter Writer by Ann Rinaldi. Quick read and ...

That seems absurd. The whole story does not piece together.

I enjoyed this piece very much. The only concern that I have is that there were spelling errors and in he beginning when you talked about the Titanic being 'unsinkable' ...

I am doing a dance for a competition to Wasehd by the water. I love it!