ballerina13

Hello! I really enjoyed reading this. The message it conveys is interesting and compelling. As other viewers have mentioned, it is spelt "Satan." But! On another note, the flow was ...

Hello! This was so cute and happy. I loved it. The metaphors and personification are wonderful. The word choice and rhythm are nice. The flow was nicely done. Great job! ...

Wow! That is wonderful. I love the different phrases that you use to describe the mist. I could see it all clearly. Great imagery. Keep it up! ~Ballerina

Hello! And welcome to YWS. Alright, so this was nice. I loved the imagery and descriptions that you had in it. The poem was deep and full of emotion. It ...

Hello! I enjoyed this very much. The theme was sweet yet heartwrenching. The poem was full of imagery and emotion. The story is relateable for many people which I think, ...

I feel that this poem could be more descriptive. Tell us why she is so unhappy? What caused her to be this way? The imagery is nice and the word ...

hello! I loved this. It had a sense of nostalgia. The tone of it was wonderful and the imagery was top notch. Peter Pan is one those stories that you ...

So this is actually kind of a personal memory- something I VERY rarely write. But here it is- I dunno if it fully makes sense to other people though. Well ...

Hello! I love this. It has a lot of imagery and the message is subtle and artistic. I, personally, enjoyed the first one better than the second. First one was ...

Hello! This was sweet and heartwrenching. I loved the first to paragraphs. You developed a character that we want to know what happens to. I think that her being sink ...

Hello! This was wonderful. It is so charming and cute! I love the storybook feel to it. The lyrics are so meaningful and deep. As far as grammar goes, there ...

This was wonderful. The flow, the rhyme and the depth was all there. I don't really know what else to say. Great Job.

Hello! I enjoyed this but the sentence structure was a bit short. Along with a few spelling errors. Besides that I really liked reading this. You developed your character well ...

Hello! I enjoyed reading this and I love the idea. It has potential. Although, I feel that it is to short.Are you going to add more to it? In the ...

Hello! I really enjoyed this. But I feel that you should elaborate on the couple in the beginning. At first you think that they are teenagers but later in the ...