ballerina13

I found this piece interesting. The concept is different and that it what makes it a good read. You the scenes beautifully. Although, your character is lacking in details. Show ...

AS the other reviewers have already said, there is a lot of repetition. But, I will discuss something else. I love the way you developed your main character some more. ...

This was good but I found it lacking in physical detail.The plot was intriguing and I am interested in reading more of it. Your main character sounds interesting to learn ...

9/10! Fun! :smt005

*Hugs*

This poem is so sweet. It flows well and is very inspiring. The message is clear and meaningful. I loved it! I definitely think that you could lengthen it though. ...

Banned for being from the Land of the Zombies. :smt001

This was interesting. I found a few grammatical errors and some words missing so just re-read your story and you will be all set on that part. I found the ...

I found this story interesting. It made you think. My favorite part was the last three lines. They were very powerful. You could definitely create this to be a longer ...

I thought that this was well written. At some parts it was a little hard to tell how was speaking though. You stuck the characters personalities very well and created ...

The story is coming on beautifully.I love how much emotion you put into your character. It seems to be very fast paced though in my opinion. Slow down and describe ...

I am chills! This was a great way to start the story. I made me want to read on desperately. Your piece has great voice and I can see it ...

Um....? I wish that I could go back in time to the 19th century. :thud:

"Dance is music made visible" ~ George Balanchine "Far away in the sunshine are my highest aspirations. I may not reach them but I can look up and see there ...

An author that I wrote to recommended YWS to me and I just keep coming back to it! :lol: