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Hey LittleLionWoman, Thanks for the review, although you're right about not reading it right. Well, everyone's entitled to reading poetry in a particular way but I feel that mine was ...

The burning wall – it seems ignited, with ice, emitting smoke. The cold biting through skin; his, mine, ours. For hours, it has been. Truth? Not welcome! Pretend’s an easy ...

Thanks :)

I just wrote a poem somewhat about writer's block as well. I was a bit concerned about the inconsistency of the rhyme scheme, but reading it a second time, I ...

I like that this poem has some depth in it, some sort of social relevance if I'm reading it right? - a good break from all the love poetry. I ...

* I haven't been writing poems in awhile, so this may need a lot of criticism *winks* i am very much thirsty for reviews! Sorry if the rhythm seem's a ...

Thanks for the comments! I just realized the metaphor in the last line is a bit out of place because it's much deeper compared to the other lines which are ...

Your arms brush against mine, nerves shot up in quivers. A pulse follows in hurry, so afraid to wither. Hungry for an embrace, I taunt you with my eyes. Head ...

can we send in several entries? :)

What can i say? I love rhyme especially when it has some humor in it. I would just have to suggest that you keep a consistent meter scheme so that ...

I see the conscious effort to make things rhyme, but if you read it through; the rhythm doesn't really flow well. Other than that, I see potential but you might ...

I feel your sentiments, dear! It's a common occurrence for friends to get attracted to one another. I guess a lot of people can relate to this. Perhaps you can ...

I like the structure and the consistency of rhyme but you might want to work on the flow of rhythm. Try counting syllables or perhaps read it out loud; that ...

Short, simple, yet full of depth. The imagery was striking. Keep up the good work!

I got intrigued to read this poem initially because of the title. I was prepared to comment that you change it because it's the title of a mainstream song. But ...