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Hmm, interesting. First, on your poetry - it fits the story well, but I think you need to work on your line length a bit in places. Read it out ...

I nod impressedly at the immensity of your writing skill. Ness. Heh, seriously - I'm not a big romantic fiction fan, but this was a good read; not too soppy, ...

(Politics, lad, political lyrics!)

5/10 Not a huge KC fan, I've gotta say. And this reminds me of those t-shirts that you see in hordes now (ironically) that say "you laugh at me because ...

Been there, done that; it's not as much fun as it first appears.

I found the line breaks a little excessive, but then, there could be some hidden meaning there I'm just not getting. It's good, and there are some excellent lines there ...

I think it would be better as prose. I has been done before :) doesn't mean you can't make it good, of course. Now, if you kept the italics, got ...

Year of the Cat by Al Stewart. What an absolutely amazing song.

England! Happy happy country here. Apart from the weather, of course. And the chavs. And the government. And the rampant black death and touch contractable AIDS. Happy! All Happy!

Heh. I'm sorry. OPERATION DESSERT STORM Silence, and the frozen-hearted bottle layeth plans the like of which no yellow-bellied mustard jar could summon in his nightmares; O, sleep on ye ...

It's true, ladies and gentlemen. Jesus is dead. Heh - emo night was fun, though.

Hey everyone! See my finger? It's pointing toward the door.

::bows:: I wrote it quite a long time ago; somehow, the lyrics got all over the internet. Weird how these things happen.

The good thing is it isn't forced. The bad thing is it isn't organized, either. Throws off the flow quite a bit. Yes, quite right; I realised that I actually ...

I'm thinking that "fit" is a little beyond me :D but a bit more muscle and stamina might be nice. Getting published is always a resolution!