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Well. Mixed opinions on this one. Your style is different, which is good in itself: there are times when you sound way overpretentious; this tone might be excellent when writing ...

It ain't got a thing goin' for it. Firstly - grammar. Hey you yes you we need to talk Where are the commas that make this readable? Think about how ...

Right, down to business! Travel in space see what’s in store, OK, problem here is that you need a comma after "space" to make the sentance grammatical - try saying ...

Good haiku, though it's a little cliche :) I'd suggest 'Wiederbelebung' as a title.

I wrote this practically with my eyes closed, because I couldn't quite see it if I was looking. And then I couldn't change it; so it'll have to be a ...

Eh, I'm lovin' the Jackson style :) I envision him fat too, however, and always will ;)

So, I really couldn't care less about how offensive it is. This is not because I disrespect the Islamic religion (in fact, the absolute automatonlike loyalty it continues to inspire ...

So, I have no idea how this managed to get by without being commented upon. People's lack of willingness to read anything long, I guess: shame. Well, it's a class ...

the off rhythm in the last line of the first stanza. I don't think so: ten syllables per line, to the metric inch ;) I don't usually mess up my ...

Ah :) it's the Beatles' old recording studios, which is where it comes from, though I think there's actually a street near me called that as well.

And behold, unto you it is given! Eh. I'm tired. 1. It was a quiet evening, as quiet as it got in New York; no gunshots, no screams, no crackle ...

RESPONSE He woke to find your letter in his hand, crossword-cryptic, and without a name; wandering, the way that poets do with teary script like roses in the rain. The ...

Nope, not happy with this. Firstly, you've forced a rhyme. I don't know how many times I say it, and I'll probably end up saying it plenty more: DON'T start ...

For grammar and punctuation, high marks: A or A- For concept, probably about a B-; it's not very original. For rhythm and meter, LOW: E+. There's no sense of you ...

Both together - found a basic chord pattern, started figuring out words to go along with it, and both worked their way up slowly. The music makes all the different, ...