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How about he sends her a Valentine?

I think we all wish we could escape our voice, sometimes; mine feels so cold and impersonal, to me. I liked it - maybe because I identify with the character, ...

Pretty much everything's been covered crit-wise - just like to say I enjoyed it, and thought it was well-written. r.

See this for critique on this poem:

Hokey-dokey: First and foremost, you've spelt "you're" as "ur" in the title. It just isn't acceptable: use proper English. Now, with regards to the poem: Firstly, you have no punctuation. ...

I'm not falling for this one, I don't think. It's well written, which makes it more of a shame; your spelling and grammar are good, your dialgoue is well done, ...

Word up, folksies, let's crit some poetry. Right, first problem: it's not very poetical. There's a simple reason for this - every single one of your lines is a sentance, ...

Righty-o. Not enough punctuation! I say it to loads of people, and actually, yours it better than some, but still: the first three lines shouldn't all run together like that. ...

What one says, one must be willing to accept the consiquences for it. For instance, if I were to call a jock a homo to his face, I could expect ...

Those English translations of yours are most likely incorrect. Come on, that's like saying I can't get the basic meaning out of Camus, Dumas, Cervantes or Solzhenitsyn without knowing French, ...

Okalydokaly. Firstly, punctuation! There's all of one comma in the whole thing, which is usually reserved for slam poetry that's whirlwinded through without taking a breath. This doesn't strike me ...

Cicero's got the right of it: they are well-written, but when you've read them all, like I have, they get horribly repetitive. There are some phrases that he uses *so ...

Oh so you've been taught all about my religion have you? You know its teachings, the values it holds dear, and the guidlines it sets out and based on that ...

Point of advice? Write in real English: that includes comments. It needs to become a habit.

because i was describing something that happened to ME. No, no! This is exactly the point I'm trying to make: when your writing is centered around your own experiences, and ...