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That's cool; you rock either way. And I was finally worthy of a critique from Brad! Truly I have made it... Anyway :) thanks to everyone for your input; it ...

It's connected all the way through, you just have to look a little deeper :) it's there, believe me; I wrote it first with love in mind, then war.

:) When soldiers in WW2 sent letters back to their families, they didn't always have much room to write, so they used abbreviations that became common; "S.W.A.L.K." was one such, ...

Aye, well. Criticism appreciated; I like the idea on this one, want to make it as good as possible. SAINT VALENTINE'S DAY MASSACRE Today I am the terrorist of love, ...

hmmm, poets have freedom so I've been told and when I went to a conference to see simon armitage that was the exact question I asked. "Is there a right ...

Revenge is irresponsible, but vengeance is justice. Or summat like that, I forget the real quote. Perhaps, “Nothing is more costly, nothing is more sterile, than vengeance” from Winston Churchill?

Cic: yep, I know it's old and bad French; the point was something like the first line being a ridiculously cliche poetic line ('meeting someone under the clock tower') - ...

I find the last two lines of this stanza slightly confusing. If your lips are sealed, how are you "drinking life's lees"? Perhaps a few clarifying verbs? Here's my suggestion: ...

I'll defend Ender's Game to the death. You; me; shotgun wedding. My heroine!

I accepted a long time ago that there are an immense number of complete and utter philestines in the world. As such, when people express such opinions, I find the ...

Just a couple of thoughts right now, as I'm short on time, sleep and concentrational ability. Structure and line breaks: specifically, why have you put the breaks where you have? ...

I owe you a more indepth critique: for now, my niggle is the structure of the second stanza, which seems to get a little messy toward the end. Your rhythm ...

Yeah, well, by that logic all my Christian friends in Beirut should have a say in the war crimes trial of the Israeli government, considering they've been bombed more times ...

Lots of churches with really young congregations are starting to sing the really old hymns again, just because they're belatedly realising just how incredible and beautiful a lot of the ...

Thanks guys, I'll try and work in all suggestions in when I'm redrafting, they've been really helpful. Cic - the last bit was a reference to the famous Archimedes quote, ...