babymagic18

This was only okay for me. I liked it don't get me wrong but I felt as if it were really missing something and I can't put my finger on ...

"Cassie can you actually believe in a matter of months I'm going to be getting my fairy wings from the very fairy queen herself?" Adriana asked. A twinkle in her ...

This was a well written piece I enjoyed it very much. I look forward to reading more of your work in the near future. Ya know after I'm done getting ...

"Quickly, we must not be seen," He said. Walking with brisk strides he led them down a shadowed alleyway. There was no choice but to follow. At the very end ...

It was nice but the surrounding needs to be talked about like...a cool breeze blew through his hair or something like that, Something that can really make a person want ...

You have nice writing skills. I enjoyed reading this piece I could actually visualize what the individual was seeing. Keep it up. :D

That was cute in its own little way. Advice watch out for commas in your writing they are needed in writing. They are used in speech as well even though ...

My Everything Eric Chadsworth is leaning against the picture window of his study dressed in a plain blue v necked shirt and jeans. He is mesmerized by the gentle motion ...

I thought is was a well written story. It's a good story about a sister relationship. Some things you can't take back and I think that was an important lesson ...

This type of thing really happens in life though people are sent to prison for crimes they really didn't commit but others choose to believe otherwise and i think that ...

The day had started out cool with a cloudy sky. Things had gotten difficult after noon and there was simply no easy way to explain it. Maroon 12 had a ...

This sounds like it could be really interesting. You did well, other than the minor grammar issues. Hey if you don't mind me asking. Why fantasy? I mean I keep ...

This was a well written piece one thing though was that I didn't get a character visual and that would have been really helpful to me I don't know about ...

This was good the beginning was excellent a lot of visual. I could really get into the story. I won't lie I think you are actually a strong writer. If ...

I really liked the title uh, I didn't get a real visual for the character and that is really important in any story. The beginning needs work it flowed but ...