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Oh my.. That was just the funniest poem i have ever read!! Great job!! I really felt the effort in making the whole well.. most of the poem rhyme :)

I like the flow of your poem. It doesn't sound forced and it feels natural. It's a really nice piece. You should keep up the good work! I have to ...

**This is a short poem that I wrote for a friend of mine. Please tell me what you think of it. My feelings for you have gone, Banished forever as ...

This is a nice poem but to tell you the truth, it seemed plain. My suggestion would be to add some metaphors, add some more poetic words. This is a ...

I have to agree with those who posted before me that you should spell check. Also, I spotted that there were some misplaced/dangling modifiers, if you could edit these errors, ...

This is actually a very entertaining poem, I like how you made the tune light and upbeat! On my part, I have to point out the lack of punctuations, I'm ...

I like this poem, the content is amazing. it can actually make the reader stop and think about what happens when there is a war.. It serves as an eye ...

In the midst of solitude, In the darkness and silence, I tried to hide the pain, The sorrow and bitterness. I tried hiding it deep within, Foolishly believing That if ...

Unwilling to leave, Yet unable to stay. This is the predicament, I find myself in today. To move onward, Or to remain where I am, My heart says no, While ...

Loving you dear Sir, is to see you in everyone around me. To wish for nothing more than to be with you night and day. To lie awake until the ...

Thanks for all of your comments! About the rhyme scheme.. well.. this was supposed to be a Petrarchan sonnet with the rhyme scheme ABBA-ABBA-CDCDCD though I have to confess that ...

Here's a sonnet that I wrote for English class.. I'll be grateful for any suggestions! Sunsets and Sorrows Towards the setting sun I turn my gaze, While melancholy welled up ...

Thanks for the crits! I'll see what I can do to improve this. I'm glad that it turned out okay seeing as that I only wrote in 2 minutes when ...

All Alone Alone in the darkness, Without a light in sight, Melancholy threatened to swallow me whole. I tried to reach out for somebody, Cried desperately for anybody, But no ...

Here's a pic of me and jynxypanda with another friend of ours :D It was taken while we were having our graduation pictures taken ;D