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the corrections have been corrected, if that makes any sense...

yeah, the - it was magically delicious! - was supposed to be a play on Lucky Charms cereal slogan. Otherwise, yeah. The However, this date... was just going to say ...

This is only the first 7 (extremely small) pages of a 252 pg novel I'm writing. Tell me how you like it! Detectspie (a detectspie is a mixture of detective, ...

It was alright besides the spelling/grammar really leaves you wondering and wanting more.

Although it had good spelling, etc., it really didn't capture my interest and attention. Maybe if you made it more actiony, it would be better. Also, Bessie seemed like a ...