aszecsei

Sort of an exaggerated poem designed to cause more questions than it answers.

Unfortunately, I was shunned by said good-looking boys and became suicidal.

Eeek! I'm already spinning out ideas on what will happen next... Very well-written. I didn't find any spelling/grammatical errors, and you captured the mood of children at a funeral very ...

Hooray! Finally, a really good Harry Potter fanfic! You have annihilated my superstition that it's bad luck to make a Harry Potter fanfic - good job! Please keep writing this, ...

Fortunately, the bicycle was a rather unappealing shade of red.

Fortunately, she realized this and started spelling "unfortunately" correctly.

Yikes! Really interesting, made me want to see that McKenny loses. It sort of confused me when you switched from Amad's perspective to Parker's, but once I sort of read ...

"Smile," the TV's bland, monotone female voice told Mr. Maple and his two children, Marilyn and Josh. "Because no matter what your situation is, it can always - always - ...

One edit, She looked about with a disapproving eye that made confetti cease and all fall silent. Maybe the confetti part should be changed to "cease falling". Otherwise, it's slightly ...

Right, but still, it helps to know what you could change to make it more real if you so choose.

Loved it! Although there should be a period at the end of "Thanks . " Really loved how you interwove the two characters so that you weren't too jumpy when ...

Fortunately, aszecsei knew how to spell unfortunately.

Well, it helps a fantasy story to be (somewhat) grounded in reality. Otherwise, you just read it and it's like "Okay, that would never happen." If it is grounded in ...

What if an alarm went off when we opened it or it might just be locked somehow. This should be a question! As mikedb1492 said, there are several things that ...

Fortunately, everyone liked this secret and threw her a party.