asxz

Hi, I'm back, I'm sorry if I was harsh before, and this next part might sound harsh too, but there isn't anything as bad criticism! Sorry for the double posting, ...

Hi, I'm asxz and I will be your critique I had a fairly big advantage by starting at the age of eight; where as most girls started at age twelve. ...

The 3...2...1... countdown was his flashback of the day before the race, ending where the beginning began. I wrote this story when i was 12, so i might go back ...

I think it was more of "blood makes it a red carpet", but i don't really know. I might go back and expand on it more, which i wasn't planning ...

Thank you Evi, that's helped alot, I'll take that into consideration for my future writings!

When I was writing it, I meant for it to be a prolouge of a book, or the begining of the first chapter, in a dream or something. then they ...

Wow, that's a cool story! I find that when prompted with absurd topics I can write with adrenaline too, and just let my mind run wild!