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I like what's in the first picture (the scenery) but I think that it wouold have beeen better if you made the focal point lower, because i doubt that an ...

I sprint through the hallways, new shoes squeaking on the linoleum. Stopping for a look at the map in my hand, I search for my science room, forty-eight. But the ...

I liked it. And no, if it was the beginning of the novel, I would keep reading. Mind you, I don't like fantasy, so I would probably just leave sometime ...

[quote='Kate.Grace']This is a really fantastic. I have found little (actully barely any) criticism with this. I love the way you build tension through threats. Make us rethink our opinion of ...

That's an awesome speech (you misspelled it) on how we're losing originality. I love how you described it in potatoes and then implied it in a human by that phrase ...

Well, I wrote this like it would be said in a speaech, bit technically it's an essay. Enjoy: A few days ago, my friend pulled out a potato chip from ...

Alright. I liked it, just from the beginning, you had me intrigued. I haven't read the first two chapters, and I didn't think that i would really be able to ...

Wow... that was quick!

Sorry Cassie ): I didn't mean to make anyone feel depressed... It was just an idea running through my head for a while. Sorry!

Hmm... I like the idea, and I like the story and plotline, but I think you would do well to add a bit more description in there, or soemthing that ...

I tried to put some line breaks into it, but I'm not sure if they are showing up...

Hmmm... Not sure if this is Dramatic Poetry, but I tried to make it kind of dramatic. I didn't mean for this to be insensitive, and I am extremely sorry ...

I used o like twilight, I mean, at the time I thought it was written well, but after coming to this site I know that she just had 'F7' at ...

I got off easy. The cobra had pulled itself out of the fight. Surely next time I would not be so lucky. And I had absolutely no doubt that there ...

Hi! Here to review: First of all, your first paragraph isn't a very good eye-catcher. A short, bald, plump man in a pin striped suit walked stressfully backstage of the ...