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Hey! Thanks for the review. I didn't actually edit this one too much, but I should have. For some reason I always hit the /;/ key instead of the /'/ ...

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The time Chasers :: Part One By the time she had slithered out of her clothes, walked freely over to her draws and carefully extracted her poly prop and old ...

I think the badges thing is a cool idea, but the ones you posted, Nate, looked very clutter-ish. If you did go through with this, I would suggest something like ...

Hmmm... gotta say that i like the prologue better, but not by much. Just because it had more action. I like the way you start here, though. Kind of catchy, ...

Actually... the other way around. The drug effected only her, so the clotes were moving really really fast, but she was moving faster (something about a maximum speed) Anyways, cool ...

I agree completely with everyone else who reveiwed. Amazing piece, really. You should be proug, but I would like to know some stuff suck as: How old is she (You ...

Hmmm... Okay. Now I don't exactly get what's going on here, mainly because you're trying to open your little sister's christmas present (which is a 5 year olds toy) and ...

I got two pages and three chapters into a book when I was 11 years old. Four pages and One chapter into a book when I was 12 years. Ten ...

They did it in a very cunning way. First, they tapped into the supermarket security systems, which held all of the credentials of every customer who had ever used a ...

I'll check it out. Um... first of all, it wasn't blood, it was a jelly tip ice cream. Notice how I never used the word blood. Any ideas on how ...

The crimson substance splashed on the pavement, exploding in all directions. Guilty stopped and looked down, eyes wide at what he had done. “No… Oh my god…” his voice was ...

what would you do if you were suddenly proclaimed the best writer of all time...

Anyone feeling deflated? I got to say... it's been a day since I finished, and I don;t feel like I've accomplished anything. I mean, it's not even half way done, ...

Hmmm... Sorry, but it's boring. I wouldn't read on. It's just too... Like you said. No action. Nothing happned. 3/10 ---\ === Being a bit of a hypocrite here, but: ...