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Hi, looks like I get to review! And right now, you are in the Shiyru infirmary abbreviate it, nobody talks like that anymore Quile looked like he was crying but ...

Hi, looks like I get to review! And right now, you are in the Shiyru infirmary abbreviate it, nobody talks like that anymore Quile looked like he was crying but ...

This is the review the you asked for... Just some small mistakes I found, first up... “Oh, Maggie.” sneered Alison. "Clumsy, clumsy Maggie. Would you like a hand?” she asked ...

As the detective ended a day of tough work she received a phone call. “Detective Johnson come here quickly there’s been a murder” said the shaky voice of her assistant ...

Thanks guys! have changed it around a bit.

Thank you for the reviews! They were just what I as looking for! Chapter 2 part 1 up. Same deal as last time please!

Thank you, fixed up what you said. Reviews still open

Thank you, Anyone else??

Wait, Nate, nathan & Nathaniel? don't you think that it's going to get too confusing? and what about the principle, wasn't his name Jared too, aswell as the senior guy? ...

Did all of that come from renovations? I somehow don't believe that, sorry I didn't read the others reviews, but you need to go and read over this again, some ...

WOW, I know how she feels. I absolutely hate shopping! its the most annoying thing, and i have a sister, who is an absolute shopaholic. (who could imagine a weirder ...

Imagine a lonely child, the kind who didn’t have any friends in school. When most children would know how to play a simple game of hopscotch by then, she wouldn’t. ...

nice work... onto the next one now!

Hello, again, this was pretty good for a romance! EUGH. a cant see any other mistakes than those that have already been pointed out. Good work

Nice work there! is the entire story going to be told in the two views? that was a good introduction to both of the characters. I don't usually read romance, ...