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Alright, It's a bit long, I just want to know what you think... The tune takes a bit long to get settled in... Can you imagine Anything worse Than being ...

Light and dark Black and white Time and space The joy of sorrow The Clapping hand Rejoicing times Never in sand So I see People in love The world above ...

Hi, It is a cool poem, but sadly you have failed as a poet. You shouldn't have to explain to us what you are talking about, and that is why ...

I have to agree with Tsun, this does sound a lot like twilight. also,i think that you got this the wrong way around: "No your not! Your one of them!" ...

Um mm, I'm not religious or anything, but I'm pretty sure that life just wants to BE , there is no purpose of life... "consider the lichen. lichens are just ...

Ha ha, My favourites... "No, No, there's actually a bit of poetry in that, 'cause he's saying that when he's Young his whole life was ahead of him. The whole ...

But this isn't real For I've nothing to reveal This is really the only thing that sounded odd to me, having real, and then reveal... It's like not using the ...

The earth rumbles and cracks beneath my feet Then a thrusting force knocks me to the ground A tremendous quake I cannot defeat No escape the monster is all around ...

Ha ha, good work, you got a lot of reviews for this one.... I say yes, keep writing. looking forward to hearing more. I know why you did this, I ...

Hello, This is my first chapter book, or the first 2 chapters and the prologue of it anyway! I'm just wondering what you guys think, what I need to improve ...

Hey, thanks Pippiedooda, I have modified the story, and the thoughts that weren't in italics i forgot to do when I copy pasted it into the box, but thanks for ...

Hey, everyone on this site is helpful, and you'll get heaps better at writing because people critique your work truthfully, not like you friends, who don't want to hurt your ...

Well, I adore Twilight... You simply have to read the book and make a decision for yourself, but you will find those who love, and loath twilight on this sight! ...

Hello, I have all comments in the file. Sorry if I was harsh!

hey, critiqueing now. I actually want to give up,. the first bit is SO boring. But, I will continue, and I'm sorry if I sound harsh at all, but it ...