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Because it's all to do with the temperature at which they form at. Also, the time of day, how much water is below them, etc... If you look at the ...

Yup. I like this version better. The personality of this comes through more, and I can almost hear his voice when he says stuff like, yeah, I'm a deep man, ...

I write because it makes me happy, and it's something to do in the summer holidays when summer doesn't arrive. (It's half way through summer holidays tomorrow, and for some ...

I agree with thajaro. You need a cliffhanger. For me right now, it sounds like a lament. Nothing's really poking out, but that's what the pece is supposed to be ...

I'm meerely using it as a substitute while I think of a better one. Sorry, but I'm trying. I just wanted to put it up on the site...

Bit more critical maybe??? Sorry to sound needy, but what exactly did you like about it... any parts that made you confunsed?

Chapter two part one up.

“I imagine you’re hungry,” came the calming voice. I opened my eyes to find one of the nurses standing one step inside the door, same place as earlier in the ...

I felt like a little child being taken to the naughty corner as I followed the woman out of the room. There was no kitchen in the hotel unit, just ...

Hi! I shall be your first reviewer! First of all, this sentence sounds a little odd: Where was I? What happened to me? Who was I? I didn’t know. It ...

16+ for use of mild swear words. “You love it here. Everything is perfect. The food is delicious. You don’t miss your friends or family. You don’t want to go ...

Thaynks, grate too here that you licked it. (Yes, that was gramatically incorrect in any way I could think of... but I didn't put a semi colon in, surprisingly.) And ...

I like the idea, and you descriptions in the first half were absolutely beautiful. But I disagree with caytlin. I think that you should leave it there. You've made your ...

Part 3

The kitchen was directly next to the hallway, which held the stairs and, most importantly, the front door. When the sound wave hit, she could most certainly hear the slow ...