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Hi, Cat! Could you please review these for me? Prologue, Part 1 Prologue, Part 2 Prologue, Part 3. *Cookies*

Hi, third part of my prologue! Once I reached the top, I raced back through the corridors that I knew as well as the back of my hand. It was ...

Hi, part 3 is now up...

Hi! Thank you for the reviews. The next 2 parts are up, they should be near the top of the forum!

Hi, I'm not going to go into the nit-picks, just the over-all structure & flow of the piece. The Garden Chapel Everywhere Teresa looked, she saw black. Their clothing caught ...

hello, I'm entering a competition,l the writing has to appeal to boys, so could you please focus on that? [Remember, focus is what boys want to read... Thank you!]

Sure, I'm on it!

he he, I love it! The atmosphere is awesome! I like the short sentences and the repeating... normally it would do my head in, but you pull it off perfectly!

Okay. Thanking you, yrclever! The post is now updated... Man, I had a lot of grammar, spelling mistakes in there!

Done... Next please!

XX Submitted for publishing.

Okay... so you say rip it to shreds... Here goes! My cell was dank, and it smelled. Just letting you be aware that your opening sentence isn't that good. You ...

Four more... Boltageman dropped out!

Hi, Thak you for all of the reviews. I have made most of the changes in the re-write, and it is posted here and here . Reviews are wecome... Thank ...

Hi, second part of my prologue, there will be three parts I think... * * * After leaving the block last, only two had followed me, but they were faster ...