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Hey. Could you review this for me? Chapter 4 Don't worry about being in the middle of a book. I put a precie at the begining of the piece to ...

I love it. I really can't get a conversation going in my writing, and you do it so well... I'm looking forwards to the rest of the experiments!

I loved this, and I'm happy to see you back on YWS again, KJ. The mystery, suspense, and reality to your story drew me in. It was really good. However, ...

Okay, I'm back. Sorry I was late... again... but I do have to say that I enjoyed the story. First of all, since Rosay has gotten all of the nit-picks, ...

Hi, this has been on my computer for a few months now, and I've finally decided to put it to the YWS panal! Just to clarify, this is the first ...

Okay, this is long. i have to come bact tomorrow and review, but I will get there. Sorry for the wait!

Okay, just a quick one for a quick chapter. I think it's good, although I would like to see the imagry of the electro cutters some more. i have no ...

Okay, here to review, as promised... yes, I know it's a little late; long story. Well, it seems that Writewhatiwant and Dementer have gotten to all of the nit-picks, so ...

Oh my gosh... sorry guys. Something screwed up with the reply notification, and I haven't checked it for days! Right onto it, then.

I must say, you have a very nice writing style. I was gripped, and the twist at the end... lovely. Only thing to point out here is that you say ...

Okay, so I get that they're brothers, but you don't specify their ages. Just something that you could think about, otherwise you did great! Honesty, a picture worth a thousand ...

Okay, i just started to read this one, and I can say that I have no quarrys with it. You had excelent writing skill there,a nd the interaction between the ...

I'm not sure I like the whole build up and then a miss, but as a bit of flash fiction, I guess it's fair. :) Yeah, I suppose it was ...

Okay, my sister had to write a creative short story for english, and she asked me to write it for her. You had to describe someone you knew as best ...

Okay, I don't mind how long you take... I just want other peoples opinions, and some basic grammar checks.