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Okay, so the 'grade' thing, that's because I live in NZ, and we have 'year 9,' and such, so I can see why you are confused. I will now put ...

Added more detail how...? Like, take out dialogue and add description? I think I have too much dialogue... Oh, and did anyone find the ending really cliche? Or the story ...

Early Summer, 2007: It was clearance day, and the year eleven, twelve and thirteen students were free at last. A year nine girl watched them sullenly through the classroom windows. ...

I like this. I knew exactly what was coming, but yet my eyes widened as he shot Luke. It was a surprise. All the time I suppose I had been ...

My eyebrows knitted Uh.... knitted eyebrows? It sounds like it should be a good description, but I have no idea what the sentence is describing. Take it out? “I didn't ...

Wow! When I read this, I thought you would be sixteen or something! Amazing. Now, in the first part, I found a few errors that I did not see in ...

I did like this. It was very good, and the character development was clear. My only problem with this story was that, i felt it was too short. I felt ...

This is great - really. I wasn't in the mood to read something long right now, but it flowed so well that I didn't even realise. Keep it up :)

Thanks for all of the comments, YWS-ers! I'm not sure if I can be brave enough to go back and read something that close to twilight, to edit, but I ...

OMG> I just had a nearly completed review... then I clicked away from the page... and it's all gone. I'm so sorry! I shall get right to it! Okay, this ...

Amazing! I loved it! It's so...descriptive. But in a good way. Not like Harry Potter where it take four pages to describe a smell. Ugh. Even though werewolves are more ...

Hi! I shall review. And by the way, I am sick of vampire stories, so I'll be harsh... but as long as you don't go all Stephanie Meyers on me, ...

Can I put in some 'news' that happened about seven years ago? Can we make a page called 'The Olds' or something? Collection of storys from a year back or ...

This is great. I don't think I can add to the coments above, so I'll just say that I couldn't keep my eyes open a few minutes ago, and now ...

"Don’t blame yourself for your family’s death Ava! None of the incidents that occurred is are/were your fault.” Carla’s bronze hair fell into her eyes as she stared at me ...