astrogemini

To Monday. I know that's not much more time, but maybe just maybe I could get a little helpful input. It's about 1000 words. --- Right now in Africa, in ...

My blood boiled. My heart tried to squeeze out between my ribs. My knuckles tightened on the branch until they were white as sheets. I wasn’t breathing. With narrowed eyes ...

Hey before I start I just wanna say it's a little difficult to read because of the improper spacing...okay I'm gonna start now. It's okay, everyone does that at least ...

First of all let me say I like the action and the vocabulary comes off nicely too to create a really...nice effect. I'm using nice not for a lack of ...

I like the flow of your writing. It's a little lacking in imagery, but it's really a great start. I'm curious as to what happened at the masquerade. And with ...

It’s been years but you still linger on me. You’re in my hair, on my lips, and in my smile You’re tucked away behind my eyes, in my dreams, and ...

I got clairvoyance.

Why?: Predicting the future =That's so Raven, and who wants that? Reading Minds = As if I need more voices in my head. Telekenesis = I'd be probed by the ...

Time limit... Way to leave us in suspense. So far this is shaping up to be my favorite chapter. No complaints as of yet. We'll just have to wait until ...

That was quite the impressive story if I do say so myself. I was intriguing and full of mystery. I was easy to get into too. Only a one question, ...

Glassjaw dude, Thanks for the compliment, it'll be a while before I get anymore put out for the reason pointed out so eloquently and subtly by crazyhat. But thanks still, ...

Funny thing is I wrote it before I saw the movie or Firefly. I'm making the appropriate changes so that's not the case anymore. So I have alot of revising ...

“Taking off the helmet on a foreign ship is never safe, what if we were aliens?” I woke up to one of the guys in uniform talking to me. His ...

I like your writing, it's really powerful. It's pure and free and I don't know what I'm talking about, but I really liked it. It was really good.

Laughter is softer Tears come closer Right here at the beginning of the second part you repeated and that bugs me so much, because your poems tend to be strong ...