ashleylee

I agree with clograbby...I can find absolutely NOTHING to correct. Everything is flawless and flow wonderfully. The Ending: superb The Characters: all worked out in the end. However, I would ...

Good good good :D Only one thing again: But then, in the midst of it all, she had stopped dreaming. She’d stopped dreaming and could see nothing but past or ...

Okay, wonderful. Nothing extremely wrong that I noticed. I only have on suggestion. He exuded nothing but elegance and disillusioned grace—he did as the Romans did, questioned nothing, and smiled ...

Night Mistress : Of course I will PM you when I post the next chapter. :D And yes, Isaac and Sophia are getting deep :wink: Ah..DUH! Obviously you can send ...

sasquash : Thanks so much! :D I promise to try to answer a least a few questions. But I don't want to give them all away because then I don't ...

I am going to apologize ahead of time for such a small review but I do have a reason: I found absolutely nothing to correct No grammatical errors or spelling ...

Umm...this was sooo sad :cry: Seriously, when I first started reading and found out what your characters were going to do, I thought I would simply HATE this piece. I ...

I only noticed one thing in this chapter: She was what I was supposed to be fearing? I think just plain “fear” instead of “be fearing” would fit better. But ...

Interesting. :D Let me get the individual stuff out of the way first. Olivian grinned as her grandmother swept her in to a healthy hug. “Healthy hug”?? I didn’t know ...

Very sweet and romantic. Sondre is so lovable. I really grew attached to him :D Only a few errors I saw: “I’m going on tour,” I say straightening strap to ...

Umm…wonderful! :D For one, I simply love anything about Rome. I am writing a story set in this magical place as well :wink: But anyway, for another point, your use ...

Scasha, this is the seventh chapter review. As usual, this was good! :D Full of excitement. Very suspenseful. I would have liked to see more of the battle between Melody ...

Writing for love is a pas I'm glad you like it so much! :D And thank you so much for the compliments. Yeah, hopefully I will finish this! Hopefully...:wink: lol ...

To everyone Same as Part one, I edited as much as I could, adding more depth to my MC and everything else. Also, more detail is present and more emotions ...

To everyone : I have changed all that I could with this, adding more detail and thought to my MC. Also, I added an additional paragraph, to add more to ...