ashleylee

This was cute! I read all three chapters today and I must say I enjoyed it immensely. However, I felt the first chapter moved WAY too fast for my taste. ...

All right :D Yes, I must agree that the ending was cheesy, but sometimes that’s what makes Romantic Fiction so lovable. But anyway, I do have a few things to ...

I only noticed one this and it is really petty: Suddenly, she heard the door bell ring. Doorbell should be one word. (told you it was petty :wink: lol ) ...

All right, this is my first time posting in Advanced Critiques, so just bear with me if my comments suck! :? Anyway, here is the first four chapters that I ...

WOW!!! That is SO creepy. It reminded me of one of those psychos on CSI or something :shock: I just finished reading a detective book with murders and stuff and ...

Well…that was interesting. At first, I thought these “kids” I guess, were WAY older than you said they were. They acted like twenty-five-year-olds, not eighteen-year-old kids! And I think that�

Writing for love is a pas & Abocreature : WOW! You guys are so great! :D :D :D You make my day!!!!

Gosh, that was so sweet. I seriously “awed” audibly when I finished reading it. It was THAT cute! You did so well with this. I mean, I have read stories ...

omsvmars22 & endless_secrets : Thank you both SO much. It really helped me A LOT! :D :D :D You guys are AWESOME! soconfused4512 : I know. I bet you read ...

Usually I don't read stuff like this...but shockingly, I really, REALLY enjoyed your story. Suspenseful and...erotic :wink: You did well with your MC too. We really got inside his head ...

Night Mistress : Omgosh...I'm SO sorry! I totally forgot to PM A LOT of people...you have to know me. I am like the most forgetful people you will EVER meet ...

Dommy65 : Thank you SO much :D I'm glad you like it!

Oooo, I liked this. It had a very suspenseful atmosphere. I am guessing that this is going to be a forbidden love story where the red-haired girl is part of ...

I think you did really well with the ages for high school and such. Everything seemed realistic. And I found nothing out of place. No errors that I saw. However, ...

Well, here is the next chapter. Hopefully you enjoy it :wink: Happy Reading! **Edited as of Sept. 21** ________________________________ CHAPTER EIGHT I wake up late on Saturday to find that ...