ashleylee

Wow! That is one messed up case! I mean, everybody involved basically could have done it! That’s crazy how you involved all of them. Nice job! I really found nothing ...

I found this story to be really quite adorable, especially the ending. Now, before I go into more, I’ll do individual stuff first. As we settle into the huge beanbag ...

Hey, I'm back! This was good! You had many things right going on in this story and I only found a few grammatical mistakes, such as commas before names. But ...

JFW1415 : I knew someone was going to say that eventually, about the "too perfect" thing. I hate making my stories like that but they seem to end up that ...

Night Mistress : Thanks! :D Yeah, like I know where I want to go with this story, but it is SO hard to protray it onto paper, you know?? Well, ...

Hello again! I'll get the individual stuff over first: Masks were either full faced or half and my own mind knowing that the artwork of the masks were absolutely magnificent. ...

Hello again! I for sure like the first few paragraphs WAY better. Your sentences are so much smoother. Nice work! :D But I did notice a few things... I sighed ...

Hey, Brianna! Okay, I did notice a few things in your edited post: Adam sat down in the chair and we bound him to the chair. You say "chair" twice. ...

All right, I couldn't resist posting this. I got the idea a few nights ago and I just HAD to write it down. But for some reason...I'm struggling with it. ...

Okay, I found that you have a pretty solid plot going. But let me get the individual stuff out of the way first: I was there outside on the porch ...

Too short for my taste...but I guess that's just me. It was the eve of the masquerade party and everything was going according to plan. I was dancing around with ...

KJ : Thanks, kels. Don't worry about being picky or harsh. You're my best friend and I trust your advise! :wink: Anyway, the first thought that ran through my head ...

deavarna_satina: Thank you SO much, Hailey! That helped a lot! I will make the corrections as soon as I can :wink: And I'm glad you like it so much! :D

Hey, Scasha! I saw you had a new story out and decided to check it out… She managed to make it half-way across the small campus field before it started ...

Hello, there. I don't think I have ever seen you around here yet so I guess I should say "Hi!" But back your story... I just copy/pasted and will go ...