ashleylee

I'm sorry but this poem made me laugh *giggle* I mean, I struggle with math so bad and liked how you described how insane people get when they try to ...

This was a really creative piece. It really mad me laugh when she said: Whenever I used to exit the movie theatre, after seeing a terrific film full of dancing ...

Okay, I fixed the end of it so now there is only one plane crash. Also, I fixed some grammar things as well so hopefully it looks better. But if ...

Hey, thanks to all of you for liking this so much! :) It's great to hear when other's like your work. I agree with you all now that I read ...

Hey, I agree with lysolstinks on your poem. Most pieces of poetry come when the writer is in a mood of deep emotion. That's when, I believe, the best works ...

Wow! This was really REALLY good. I mean, this was just beautifully written. It told a story and ended with sorrow but it was as though they were meant to ...

Very beautiful! I agree with the above comments about that. It was simple and elegant. Well done! :)

Okay, I found this WAY more descriptive, which is great! Also, I noticed that you went from dreary to a cherry feeling with the main character, which was what you ...

Hey, I'm your first review! :) Okay, now for the nit-picks. First, I thought you had a generally good start here. I mean, it had all the elements of a ...

It was good...until the end. I thought it was funny how she flipped them the bird but I think you could have ended that better with her happy, even though ...

Oh, I liked this a lot. It had so much feeling in it. Which makes poetry poetry ! And also because it was so true! Very well done. Great Job ...

Okay, here's another attempt at a short story. My other one was kind of a disaster but I've tried again and hopefully this ones better. Harsh criticism is welcome for ...

Hey, I guess I'm the first girl to read this by your comments! Anyway, my advise is that this is too scattered. You go from one thing to another at ...

This was a little fast for me. I mean, you basically described your character but nothing of the plot. I found that you used simple details. Explain what the BMW ...

First, you really need to space this out more. I must admit I only read half-way through because it was too hard to read. It was too bulky for paragraphs. ...