ashleylee

I agree with kioneslayer that this should be a bit longer. I think you have a good start here but you need to expand your thinking. I liked how you ...

I liked this. Especially the very last line: And I shall make it so that no more hearts are torn by your villainous claws. *beams* This was just a really ...

Oh! I liked this. I think you did really well for your first poem! :) You could definetly coudl feel the power and passion behind your words! Great Job!

Oh, this was sad. And yes, this is in the right place. This is the only thing I would change: The playful fights that turned into not-so-playful fights. Instead of ...

Interesting. I only noticed one tiny thing: Laughter floated through the air to my tiny ears. A small girl in a summer dress ran past me her curly red hair ...

I thought there was a little bit of rambling going on here but other than that, I thought it was decent. Don't judge me on that though because I'm not ...

I thought this was pretty good. There were moments were I felt the poem dragged a bit but otherwise, I liked it! Keep Writing! :)

Wow. This was really beautiful. It showed the contrast between the two people and the major impacts these differences make on their lives. All I have to say is that ...

I could feel the emotion with this one. I thought this was good and it flowed really nice. Also, this is to SimonCowellLover. Poems can be stories. Sometimes, that's the ...

"Wow" pretty much sums up this poem. This was an amazing piece of literature.*stares in complete awe* This is a really amazing poem. The end was so suprising and yet ...

I agree that making the Grim Reaper to mean something else is really creative. This poem is so full of imagery and I can really picture what is happening. I ...

I really, REALLY liked this. You write so well! And there really isn't anything else for me to say since there is nothing I noticed to fix. Which is good! ...

Hey, this was funny :lol: Sometimes poem like this are just made to make people laugh. And you accomplished that so good for you! :) My only advise for you ...

Okay, I thought this was just a really cute story. That was adorable how she was so nervous and yet he liked her anyway. :) There were only a few ...

Just a few nit-picks The man stood there, completely at ease. The glare of the lantern overhead made his black hair shine, but his brown eyes were dull as a ...