ashleylee

Oh, so pretty! I must first say that your title caught my eye right away so good job with that. Second, this is a very beautiful piece. I feel that ...

Okay, I must say that this piece was very good. How the angel formed was written very well and I loved how this girl put all her parts into this ...

I agree with Bella and teenweirdo that this would be a very intersting story...if only you legthened it and put some action in it. This is WAY too short to ...

Very mysterious. Nice touch! :wink: Sorry I couldn't read this sooner but I have been so busy. Okay, well, I think you fixed everything that everybody suggested and I didn't ...

Very interesting piece. I had never read a story from the point-of-view of a camera :wink: I read the comments above and saw they pointed out basically everything. This is ...

*sobs* I seriously loathe people like that man. :evil: Why are people like him in this world? Seriously, why? Anyway, you did really nice with such a violent and emotional ...

Hey! First, I found this enjoyable. But before I start rambling, I'll start with the nit-picks so I don't get off track. These are the things I noticed: In order ...

I think everybody covered most of your mistakes above so I don't have anything to correct. But I do want to congragulate you on your creativity. This was so unique ...

I only noticed a few things: She fingered for a while with her book, lost in thought. This should be worded differently. She fingered the book for a while, lost ...

Nice work Kels. You did great on it. (as you do in all your work) I really like how you described everything and it was a good idea to make ...

First, I'm sorry but I HATE cutting my stories up once I have them written in chapter form so I guess this is just going to be long. Because if ...

Oh, I liked this! :) It was sadly romantic and very depressing. I can see the pain in this and you made this flow with ease, making it easy to ...

Oooo, this was good! I only saw a few things. "No Ellen." She tried to shrug him off, crying, but he held her back. I know Dan says this but ...

Hey I get to be your first review! Yeah me! Okay, back to reviewing, I liked this one better than the last one I read :) I don't know. It's ...

My opinion of this is that it was decent. You had an idea for this and you used to to get your point across and have your lesson learned. Which ...