ashleylee

Kelsey, Kelsey, Kelsey…what do I do with you? Seriously, you need to stop writing such good stories, or someday I might just give up writing. Gosh, you make me look ...

Good! :D I enjoyed it! You definitely caught my attention better than the first chapter! Okay, first I’m going to do the line-by-line stuff (boring, I know) and then I ...

At first, this didn’t really catch my attention. But when I reached the last few paragraphs, I now can’t wait to read chapter two! My first advise would be to ...

KJ Thanks :D I'm glad you like it!

Thanks Kels! :D You're the best! :wink:

Esme Yes, all that you say is correct so I guess I have a lot to think about! lol Thanks so much! *hint of sarcasm* jk But yes, I will ...

Okay, I am back since I noticed that you DO have parts two and three posted here! :D Umm, I'm not sure if you posted them anywhere else, but I ...

I only read part one because I think you posted the other two in seperate anyway. This was interesting. It doesn't seem like a Romance story yet, but I'm guessing ...

Oh Esme Gosh, I love you girl! :wink: Your reviews always make me laugh. You talking in third person really makes my day! lol Yeah, I really tried with this ...

sad, yet powerful... This was good. It was just a short story, yet you brought so many emotions into it. You let the reader guess what had happened before, what ...

Cute…but sad. Too bad that her dream boy isn’t what she thought… Wow, two weeks into the relationship and he confesses his undeniable love for her. What a conversation starter ...

This was decent. :D It was little-kid cute. Adorable, I guess, would be a better word. I do think you do a lot of telling, and not enough showing. You ...

Abocreature: Thanks so much! I love your reviews! :wink: And I will take your advise about the whole Bonder/Bondee thing. I was also debating if there was any way there ...

**Edited as of Sept. 19** Hope you enjoy this! Happy Reading! ________________________________ CHAPTER FIVE At school, I fear that Carmen is still avoiding me. He wasn’t there on the walk ...

Hey elephantwalrus! :D Sorry it took me so long to get to this. I have been SO busy lately…but anyway, back to your story… Of course, I loved it! I ...