asadderandawiserman

Thanks very much! I wasn't aware of my 'anyways' thing, so thanks for pointing it out. Yeah, it probably could fill a novel, but I have other ideas I'm more ...

Thanks, this review was very helpful! I'm embarrassed that there were so many clunky sentences, looking back, especially in the first half, but I'm glad you've pointed them out for ...

Thanks very much! The only other work I have at the moment are two other short stories (and they're much shorter than the two I know you've read.) You can ...

Thanks very much!

Thanks very much for this review! And welcome to the site! I'm pretty new here too, but from what I've seen it's a fantastic place to improve your skills, what ...

Thanks for the review! I'm very flattered that this gave you some interesting things to think about. I'm aware of the problems which you've sort of skirted over, and hopefully ...

Thanks for the review! Yeah, I agree that the plot isn't that great, but as I also said, I think it would have worked better to establish that some species ...

As far as I understand it, the references to wonderland are because it's not a hospital for physical illnesses, rather mental ones. I think the subject has found their way ...

Thanks for the comment! It's really flattering that you this made to think about stuff, even if you had some problems with the rest of the story. For the record ...

I don't feel like I can really review this properly, since I cant see any grammar mistakes that haven't been pointed out, and the other thing I do in reviews ...

Thanks very much for the review! Honestly, although you said you liked it in the end, I can totally understand that you were disappointed in the middle. I'm certainly not ...

I'll admit, I enjoy putting in twist endings, but the danger of this is that the story can become little more than vehicle for the twist, which is something I ...

Yeah, I think it's called a story description, but I'm pretty new here too, so I can't be sure. Thanks so much for all your kind words, they really mean ...

Haha, sorry about my long username! It's from the penultimate line of the Rime of the Ancient Mariner if you were wondering. Everything you pointed out is extremely valid, especially ...

Thanks a lot! I pictured it taking place in a society that's moving towards a dystopia, but of course it's open to interpretation since it's not made clear in the ...