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Awesome, just one little thing: “I couldn’t see them remember?” Callie said playfully mean. There should be a comma after said or something to that effct so it's not just ...

I liked it. Your writing felt familar and captivating, I enjoyed it. I've always wondered how Harry Potter world would fit in the US, so this was pretty cool. I ...

I liked it, but I thought it was weird. Especially with the whole For she is from Italy, I from Spain I guess it's good though, it was certainly interesting ...

once again very good story. I really like your characters and your setting, another unexpected twist. You did a really good job with creating stuff. I have a few problems ...

I Liked it, it was good, and totally unexpected. when it started I expected it to be another story about Kid-parent relationships and how parents live through their kids etc... ...

You have an amazing writing talent, and as the other said, you use it to create very believable characters and situations. Your writing keeps getting better and better too, I ...

Something one should always remember; a stressful night guarantees a corresponding dream, or nightmare. I watched New Hope burn. I watched thousands of faceless bodies squished together and consumed b

I really liked your writing, I thought it flowed nicely and conveyed the emotion adequately. Their were a few things that were...different, and while I thought you pulled them off ...

I really liked this, great way to start a story. I didn't find any grammatical errors, but I'm not very good at finding them anyway so for all I know ...

]I felt a foreboding sense of dread from that name as well. New Hope was a special place for me. In some ways, it was my second home. New Hope ...

Wow. Your descriptions are epic. Dark toned, slightly gory, and depressing yes, but epic. I can't think of any critism, the emotion and power behind this is breath-taking. Right from ...

I've always been a fan of warriors fanfiction, and I think you did a great job of recreating the clans and creating your cat characters. I liked it overall, but ...

I listened to bury me alive by we are the fallen, and this is what came I can’t breathe my lungs pump in desperation but no avail I’m dying Even ...

I also applaud you, it was extremely brilliant. I love these poems that take something simple or ordinary, yet lace it with so much magic and meaning. They sometimes end ...

I can't think of any other little nitpicks to add, and it looks like you've fixed most of them already. let me just say I am really excited to read ...