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I'm impressed with the way you were to talk to your audience correctly, I've never been able to do that. And your descriptions were superb, I could see this girl ...

I think you did a brilliant job. When she slaps him just as the teacher walks back in I was like no!!!! and then when you ended it with the ...

Please read: Though this is technically an essay, it doesn't follow normal essay rules. The only real rule is that we need to take an abstract idea or word and ...

Hey, again. First o fall I was really impressed with this chapter, It might be the best you've done so far(though my reading of them has been so spread out ...

Voices echo in the silence Tell of a race long ago Standing tall among the trees Emblems of stone Never decayed, never wearied Forged into eternity Creatures with undaunted grace ...

I actually enjoyed this poem. Mostly because this isn't something you would typically find on a teen writing site. You don't really find it in modern literature either. It's obviously ...

Hi there. I liked the poem, but I wasn't inspired by it. Meaning, I didn't absolutely love it. However, I think that your a talented enough writer and this is ...

This was...intriguing. It was a little long but I never got bored, so good job(I get bored with long stories very easily). This is also a very unique piece of ...

Hey, thanks for posting another chapter. Your had some nice elements, but I think it needs a little work. I didn't really get why you put that part at the ...

My calm was lost. I wanted to scream, to run. I struggled, but the hands that held me we’re too strong. We marched forward. I could feel soft, uneven ground ...

[I've just decided that I should probably add more reactions to her surroundings, she takes everything too calmly. Any feedback regarding that would be lovely. I jerked awake. My house ...

And that is how I found myself spending the entire afternoon in his Majesty's company. We went everywhere; the gallery the arena, the bowling alley. He'd been surprised that I ...

I added some detail and it ended up kind of long, so I split it in two. The capitol had been built on the remains of a once great city. ...

I liked it. It feels like it should be a part of a novel though, not a short story. You created a lot of questions and answered very few of ...

I aslo loved the story, but I have a few nitpicks that the other didn't mention, at least I hope so, It's possible I missed a few of his/her corrections. ...